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Twenty four

December 11th, 2007 (05:32 pm)
current song: Cheers theme song (don't ask)

Hey!

I hope you enjoy this. It's the last piece of my (now named) Random Meetings series. Originally, this was just supposed to be an one-shot, but inspiration came. I'm not sure of the quality, it hasn't been beta'ed (any takers?) but it was the best way I could find to give some finality to this.

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Twenty four

 When Dean sees her again, she's wearing a suit that screams FBI. The gun and the badge are his second clue. There's a brief glimpse of surprise in her eyes when she recognizes him, but her gun never wavers.

"Drop the weapon, Agent Mars." He tells her and she almost rolls her eyes.

"Drop yours, Mr. Winchester." Her tone is condescending, they both know enough to see that it's not going to happen.

"I didn't kill those women." This time she does rolls her eyes. People have disappointed her enough that she won't trust easily. "The first murder happened when I was four!"

"You could be a copycat, it could be family business." She's got part of it right. Just the wrong kind of business.

"You know I didn't do it. Call me a private investigator, I was just trying to catch who did."

"You're not a P.I."

 The situation is slipping beyond his control. He can't convince her that he's innocent without opening a whole new can of worms. And Dean won't bring another person to this life.

 Veronica falls to the ground unconscious. Sam stands behind her, she never saw him coming.

 Veronica wakes, twenty minutes later, to paramedics (called in anonymously). Her gun is empty of bullets and her head is supported by a jacket made pillow.

 Dean decides that California and blonde women are nothing but trouble.


R & R... I can't know what I'm doing wrong if you don't tell me...

Lali

Comments

Posted by: calicomary ([info]calicomary)
Posted at: December 12th, 2007 07:59 am (UTC)

you wrote "sleeping beyond" instead of "slipping beyond." Also, "Her gun empty of bullets and her head supported by a jacket made pillow" is an extremely long and well-worded sentence fragment, but a fragment nonetheless.

Posted by: calicomary ([info]calicomary)
Posted at: December 12th, 2007 08:00 am (UTC)

Nice conclusion by the way.

Posted by: Lali Lewicki ([info]lali_lewicki)
Posted at: December 12th, 2007 02:13 pm (UTC)

Thanks for pointing out the mistakes! I already fixed the slipping thing and added some verbs to the fragment!!

Thanks for reviewing too!

Posted by: ((Anonymous))
Posted at: December 14th, 2007 01:02 am (UTC)

no conclusion, just because deans given up doesn't mean veronica has, more please!

Posted by: Lali Lewicki ([info]lali_lewicki)
Posted at: December 14th, 2007 02:18 am (UTC)

Sorry... This time I'm done. Everytime I write sequels I feel that the quality decreases and since I spent the day reading some (really bad) fanfic I wrote in '03, I'm decided not to go on.

Seriously... '03 was a bad year as far as my writing goes... But I'm glad you liked and I am really sorry I can't meet your request.

Posted by: redsilkribbons ([info]redsilkribbons)
Posted at: April 11th, 2009 08:56 am (UTC)

i love spn crossovers. This one feels like it had the potential to be much longer but you've ended it quite beautifully. Thanks!

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